This poem was intented to be song lyrics. I wrote this about a year ago but never put it too music. I'd love to hear some reviews...good and bad. I'm not even sure what some of it means...but I know the feeling that inspired it.
"The words on a t-shirt are repeated with each wear,
too comfortable to notice the message that I bare. my moral compass broken, and a single grain I swearSkin to too tight ‘n itchy for the breath I ache to share
I’m nothing but a grip of appetites.
It’s not enough to keep me satisfied.
Wicked-memeber lyricist
resting fender length held knit
until a hammered nail slips, rusty broken finger tips.
I'll be near for saftey with the silence of a dame,
looking for the chance, nightly tigers flame,
lookin for the chance, new sets all three names
don’t suppose my mind is gonna change
don’t suppose my mind is gonna change
There’s sanitary squaler in a denim wear front pocket.
Danger of an enclosed hole waking from a dozen dreams,
in my throat a broken swallow.
luna, luna climbed the tree tops never thought to follow,
baby rocking falling tears, never meant before these years
praying under leaky ceiling, best intentions while she's kneeling..
...in the small room plaster peeling
she’ll find the broken streets appealing
This is only half a conversation
This is only half a conversation
Wicked-memeber lyricist
resting fender length held knit
until a hammered nail slips, rusty broken finger tips.
I'll be near for saftey with the silence of a dame,
looking for the chance,
nightly tigers flame,
while waiting winter whispers,
new sets all three names
The downtown desert doesn’t look the same
The downtown desert doesn’t look the same"
Well first there is so much visual depth to each line that that alone kept me interested and hungry for the next line.
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I love this line. I think you sould try to put it to words I'd love to hear it.
Yep some of it doesn't make sense. But I like the ones that I know have a deeper meaning even if I don't have a clue what you are talking about. Reminds me of Alana Morisetts songs. I want to read more. I could help you put it to music sometime!
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